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Some Critiques:
You've got a lot of empty dull space behind her bum / under her hand area, in the lower right corner.
And a lot of empty space between her and the vehicles / tanks.
The empty spaces are just waste, try and get rid of em.
They seem to make the image feel a lot more dull and unfinished than it really is.
Suggestion: Crop the entire image off a little below her knees. And pull up all the background / tanks vehicles up.
It should make everything closer together and make a more interesting image with less empty areas.
Also:
Make some more interaction between her an vehicles.
I like her pose but its abit stiff and not animated.
Have her right hand "flick" out or something, as if she is out walking going "la la la la" then "oooh! yummy tanks!" which I think is what you had in mind ^ ^
Ref: your image
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Her hands are "flicked" out.
While have her more interacting with the airplanes.
I would have her focus on a helo-airplane, you already have a great expression! And have her reaching for the helo-airplane with her left hand / arm.
Keep the tanks shooting at her legs, and if you crop it in, and make her reaching for the helo-plane, almost as if she is TOTALLY ignoring the tanks, and the damage from the tanks, I think the Impact and Humor of the piece will be significantly increased!
Feel free to send me a message / email if you dont quite understand my suggestions. I have no problem doing a quick sketch over and email you a JPG of suggestions if you like!
chuckporcheron@gmail.com
I give alot of my friends reviews and crits of their personal work like this all the time! All is meant to be positive and help you make the image better!
I love it, and think a few changes can make it really awesome!!!
I think if you work in Photoshop, most of my crit suggestions would be pretty quick an easy to do!
Hope to hear from ya! ^ ^
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